He knew the relationship was doomed the moment she got out of bed and began praying loudly. She was in fact louder than she had been throughout their hour long bout of love making. Well, he thought it had been love making. But as he listened to her at the foot of the bed with her hands clasped together so tightly that her knuckles were white and her eyes clamped shut as she swayed back and forth slowly in her nakedness, he learned that he was wrong.

"Oh dear Lord," she called out so loudly that ne nearly fell out of the bed, "please take us into your loving bosom and forgive us the wanton carnality of our acts in your divine presence. Know, oh mighty God, that it was not my wish to transgress so egriously. I did not wish to indulge in drink and flesh..."

And that's how it went for ten minutes; her espousing to an appearantly angry and bitter god how terribly wicked and evil they both were but oh golly gee, Mr Jesus, I sure hope you'll forgive us. Meanwhile, he slowly crawled deeper into the relative safety and comfort the down comforter his grandmother had made for him and wondered what she'd say about him now.

"...and I certainly did not expect or grant him permission to stick his finger in my ass, Jesus," she said. "And while the sex was fantastic, for that alone you may smite him however you see fit."

"So, you won't be staying for pancakes then?" he said with a sigh.

This is a piece of flashfic - roughly 500 words long. It addresses vaguely the idea of being gender queer, transitioning, coming of age, and generally being a miserable young adult. The subject's name is Kyle.

( skinny hands, bony wrists, spindly fingers )

Another Poem.

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For many of us, the holidays can be kind of rough. If you're searching for a network of understanding friends, this ultra-nurturing community encourages you to express your heartfelt wishes and offer other members encouragement and acceptance. Not for the terminally snarky or emotionally-challenged, this is a good-spirited place to lend comfort and support.

diygifts
Feeling crafty? If you've got a few last folks on your holiday gift list, this is a great place to seed your creativity and generosity. You'll also discover wonderful DIY tips to decorate your home and entertain guests. Offering a no-frills-no-skills attitude that welcomes the cash-challenged and arts-phobic, you're sure to get ideas and make friends in the process.

cooking_club
A fun and friendly community dedicated to those who love to cook, whether you're a meat-and-potatoes type, an aspiring gourmand, and/or a vegan. In search of a brilliant dish to use up those weekly leftovers? Post your ingredients and you'll be whipping up a feast by dinner. You can also share favorite recipes. For Type A chefs, you can spice up your culinary repertoire with exciting cooking challenges.

“Weren’t you trained never to point a gun at your partner?”

 

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I've just thought when asked to look through something for someone that beyond the basic point of grammar and spelling/plot (eg something doesn't make sense or continuity) mistakes what else should people be looking for?

I'm probably going to be looking through stories/film scripts in the future but it just occured to me that there could be more I should be looking for. And I don't quite know what it is.

Any suggestions?

And another poem! :)

( Wicked )

Hello. I'd really love some feedback and have been disappointed with the lack of feedback from Facebook. Haha. So I figured this would be the best place to go!

Here's to a long and fruitful relationship! I think this poem is one of my best.

( Anthem )

stepstomarrow
When granddaughter, Jada, was born with leukemia, a donor-match was located and Jada made a miraculous recovery. In honor of her grandaughter's health, Jeanna has decided to walk across the country (in the dead of winter) to raise awareness and build support for the bone marrow registry (all that's required is a cheek swab). Follow Jeanna's remarkable journey as she travels the United States by foot.

This is a story I started working on while listening to Last of the Wilds by Nightwish. It is about faeries.

I would like feedback. Sorry for any spelling or grammar mistakes. I do not always catch them all.
( The Last True Protectors )

I've been doing a lot of reading recently and it's made me very anxious to try and start writing again. I really enjoy. and would be looking to write some thing mythology/fantasy based, but the more I research the more I feel like everything has been done. Or, at least that there's a definite pattern in what stories/characters get used. Vampires would be the best example.

I was wondering if anyone had suggestions or knew of any useful resources/places to look that might help me think and possibly widen my options? Grateful wouldn't even cover my response if so.

Title: Of Acid and Marshmallows
Author: seiferre
Genre: Fantasy, Children's, Humor
Rating: G
Critique: If you would like to. :3 Mostly I'm just posting to share, but I'd like to see some comments.
Summary: Marshmallows don't consider it suicide.
Author's Note: This was mostly written for fun; I didn't intend for it to go the way it did, but I was satisfied with it. I wrote it for my sister.

( ...He was a marshmallow – sweet and fattening and perfect for hot chocolate... )

This is my first post on any kind of community site. I hope this goes alright.

Title: A Wild Song
Word Count: 386
Rating: G
Summary: Play me. Play me a song rich and deep. The violin. The violin wanted her to play its song...

(Suddenly the stage with the light cast on her vanished, and her hands and her mind played a melody atop a broken tower...)

Title: Dark Tales of Randamor the Recluse - Book I: The Invisible Chains
Author: Eurypon
Format: Novel
Length: Chapter: 10 774- Total 213 371 (December 16, 2009)
Status: WIP
Rating: NC-17 - M - M/M Slash
Warnings: Violence, incest, rape, non-con, domination may all occur in varying degrees

Chapter 29: Prince Of The Mukthars

Queen Emelasuntha gets a visit form a young man with fascinating information. Rullio of Brenx reaches the capital... but rides around it. Emelasuntha and Sobrathi, together with the men of the Tribe of Mekthona, stake out the royal castle. Baron Damydas leaves for the Northern Marches but manages to loose himself in the crowd. Rullio has another hot encounter. At Lorseth Castle a new page is welcomed by Rahendo. Ffindall Dram receives a useful report. Anaxantis and his group are exploring the Renuvian Plains and finally they set eyes on the enemy. An all to near encounter with a deadly arrow makes Anaxantis think about what would happen in the event of his death. Again Rullio's charms lead to the unavoidable. The plot thickens while two unlikely men meet each other.

Links: Aarinfantasy & FictionPress

Hi there, I'm new to LJ and figured this looked like a good place to post some of my random fandom fics. Please enjoy! Comments and CC are loved!

Title: Unconcealed
Author: lyny_angell
Fandom: Ever After
Characters/Pairing: Henry, Danielle, Jacqueline, OC, Henry/Danielle
Summary: Danielle is pregnant with her first child, but Henry's unaware of the Court customs for this situation, so he comes to bring her a little surprise.
Warnings/Spoilers: Absolutely None
Rating: Eh, T? For safety sake.
Disclaimer: Nope, not mine.

Unconcealed


Title: After Three Years
Author: lyny_angell
Fandom: La Femme Nikita
Rating: T
Warnings/Spoilers: Spoilers for the end of Season 5 (end of the series)
Characters/Pairings: Nikita, Michael, Quinn, Walter, Adam, Jason, Nikita/Michael
Summary: Michael and Adam left Section three years ago. How is everyone coping with the end? And what is the HUGE secret about Section One?
Disclaimer: Not mine, unfortunately. Though I'd *love* to own Roy Dupois! For Christmas? Please??

Note: Thoughts are in italics. Sorry about that.

After Three Years

Title: The Ranger's Girl
Author: lyny_angell
Fandom: Walker, Texas Ranger
Characters/pairing: Alex, Walker, Alex/Walker
Summary: Alex gets kidnapped all the time. It's practically become routine. But how do she and Walker handle the consequences when something very out of the ordinary happens during a hostage situation?
Warnings/Spoilers: Warning for adult situations including descriptions of Non-Con! Please, take heed and DO NOT read if you find this offensive or disturbing.
Rating: Mature Audiences only, please!
Disclaimer: Not mine.

The Ranger's Girl

So, I have a story in my heart (don't we all). But as I sat down to start it out I felt like I was pacing the story too quickly, I've put what I've written so far in the cut but it isn't much about three paragraphs. I didn't want to continue until I got some feedback about the pace, the content, all that jazz. So please, check it out!


( Mirror )

I was wondering if anyone believes its good to incorporate things that are actually going in your life into your story/stories?
Is it good to give your character "your problems" and see how they would deal with them?
Would it help you through the tough times or just make everything more difficult to express?